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: The charts below show the figure of hours per week in the industrial sector in four Europeans nations in 2002.

: The charts below show the figure of hours per week in the industrial sector in four Europeans nations in 2002.
Contained in the given charts is information relating to the time workers
spending
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spent
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on
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 the industry each week in different European nations by 2002. The data is measured in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, the differences
between
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in
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 the amount of time workers
spending
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 were significant.
Additionally
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, the number of employees using between 36 to 40
hours
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 was the highest in most countries, except for France. Looking at France, where most people worked
at
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in
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 the industrial sector around 31 to 35
hours
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, exactly a half.
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 was followed by the 36 to 40 group, accounting for approximately a third
whereas
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 other groups took below 20% each. Regarding Denmark, its highest figure was in the 36 to 40 team, at accurately 70%. Following behind is the number of citizens working from 31 to 35
hours
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, at about a quarter,
while
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this
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 number in other periods was nearly 10%. Turning to other statistics, 36 to 40
hours
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 was the quantity of time that most Swedes and people in the UK
working
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worked
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at
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in
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industry
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the industry
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, at precisely 80% for both. Following behind were the 31 to 35 group in Sweden and more than 50 in the UK, respectively at around 40% each. Other figures took under 39% in both nations.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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