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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the
population
 of
India
 and
China
 from the 2000s and
have
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 a forecast to the 2050 year.
According to
 the
data
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Inidia
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India
 and
China
 started
it
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at 1000
billions
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billion
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 and around 1250
billions
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billion
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 respectively. The chart illustrates that both countries had
a
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straight growth since the 2000s.
Moreover
, despite the fact that
India
 started with
the
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population
on
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of
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 250
billions
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billion
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 less than
China
, already, in
the
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2024, they have
difference
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a difference
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less
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of less
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 than 30
billions
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billion
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. It
is shows
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to
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us that
population
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the population
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 in
India
 rose
more
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faster.
Forecast
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The forecast
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 by 2050 describes
India
 and
China
 are going to have the same
population
 close to
the
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2031 after that
India
's
population
 is going to
goinh
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go
 up,
whereas
China
's
population
predicted
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is predicted
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 to go down
steadly
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steadily
.
To sum up
, the predicted values for the end of
specified
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 period of time are going to be around 1.600
billions
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billion
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 for Indiad and 1.400 for
China
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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