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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts provide key information about
ratio
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the ratio
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 of
water
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 used for different purposes in various world regions. The units are measured in
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that domestic
water
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 used had approximately the smallest share among all the countries.
In addition
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,
agricultures
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agriculture
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 was the dominant
regions
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region
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by
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of
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 all the
group
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groups
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, except in both North America and Europe but
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector is the major part of them about half of
total
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the total
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water
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 used.
According to
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 what is shown, Africa,
s
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's
water
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 used per cent in
agriculture
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use
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 accounted for 84% of the total,
while
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 9% and 7% for industrial and domestic
use
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, respectively.
Moreover
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,
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agriculture
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agricultural
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use
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 in Central Asia represents nearly
ninth
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a ninth
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 of the total, the highest among all the groups and only 5% for industrial
use
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. South East Asia uses about 81% of
water
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 in
agriculture
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.
While
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 industrial and domestic
use
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 both account for approximately
fifth
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a fifth
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 of the total.
Similarly
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,
agricultural
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agriculture
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 is the main
in
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apply
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sector in using of
water
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 in South America. In terms of North America
agriculture
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use
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represent
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represents
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 39%
while
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 domestic
use
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just
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is just
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 about
tenth
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a tenth
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.
Additionally
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, Europe represents 32%,
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and 15
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% for agricultural and domestic
use
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, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, agriculture, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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