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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts provide key information about
ratio
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the ratio
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 of
water
 used for different purposes in various world regions. The units are measured in
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that domestic
water
 used had approximately the smallest share among all the countries.
In addition
,
agricultures
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agriculture
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 was the dominant
regions
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region
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by
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of
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 all the
group
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groups
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, except in both North America and Europe but
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector is the major part of them about half of
total
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the total
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water
 used.
According to
 what is shown, Africa,
s
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's
water
 used per cent in
agriculture
use
 accounted for 84% of the total,
while
 9% and 7% for industrial and domestic
use
, respectively.
Moreover
,
agriculture
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agricultural
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use
 in Central Asia represents nearly
ninth
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a ninth
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 of the total, the highest among all the groups and only 5% for industrial
use
. South East Asia uses about 81% of
water
 in
agriculture
.
While
 industrial and domestic
use
 both account for approximately
fifth
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a fifth
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 of the total.
Similarly
,
agricultural
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agriculture
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 is the main
in
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apply
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sector in using of
water
 in South America. In terms of North America
agriculture
use
represent
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represents
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 39%
while
 domestic
use
just
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is just
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 about
tenth
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a tenth
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.
Additionally
, Europe represents 32%,
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and 15
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% for agricultural and domestic
use
, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, agriculture, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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