The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentageof water used for different purposes in

six areas of the world.

Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graph illustrates a comparison between ‏ North
America
,South
America
,
Europe
,
Africa
, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
in water used . The data are measured in percentages.
overall
, it can be seen that using water in agriculture is the most popular compared to other uses in all countries except North
America
and
Europe
which
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industrial use is more popular there.
Europe
and North
Africa
data are approximately the same. On the one hand, North
America
uses water as much as
Europe
at around 50% for industrial , about 14% for agricultural and less than 40% for industrial.with regard to South
Africa
, Agriculture is the highest at around three
quarter
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while
industrial is the lowest at just 10%.
On the other hand
, in domestic
use
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Southeast
Asia
and centre
Asia
has
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exactly the same at 7%.
In addition
, Centre
Asia
has half of southeast
Asia
in industrial use at 6% , meanwhile, they have 81% and 88% respectively in agricultural.
Africa
had 84% in agricultural and 7% and 9% in industrial and domestic correspondingly
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, africa, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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