Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree¿

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There is no denying the fact that most
people
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today are trying to find a satisfactory
job
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for them.
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it is a commonly held belief that
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a high
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salary
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is much
crucial
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more crucial
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than
job
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satisfaction
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,
this
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is
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an argument
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it. In my opinion, I consider that
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a high
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salary
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is not
important
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more important
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than
job
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satisfaction
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.
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with,
people
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when
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who
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work
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with an unsatisfactory
job
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will be low produced , motivated during their working. In
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another word
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, they can not
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be fact
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or creative
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they always try to find
other
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another job
other jobs
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job
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during their time.
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, they
file
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feel
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boredom,
stress
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stressed
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and
frustration
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frustrated
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because workers
file
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find
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this
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job
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not
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is not
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suitable for them and all that will
lead to
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apply
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affect their health.
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, when they
work
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a long time
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apply
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stress
that
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apply
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cases
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causes
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for them different diseases
such
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as high pressure and heart disease. Another point to consider, humans who
work
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with
with
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apply
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unsatisfactory
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job
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jobs
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do not like to develop their skills or knowledge. It is
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passable to say that they
work
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without passion or
loving
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for their
job
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.
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, they just fact with
salary
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and how to invest
instead
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of their skills. Instance, when
people
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work
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out side
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outside
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their hometown or
work
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with
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the job
a job
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job
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jobs
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with different
specialty
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speciality
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which
was
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were
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studied at their universities, in
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case
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case,
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they always do not want to learn or focus
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unsatisfactory despite they earn
a
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high solar . In conclusion, despite
people
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having different views. I believe that
job
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satisfaction
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is better with less
salary
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than
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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job
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with
high
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a high
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salary
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.
Satisfaction
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is curtail
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for continuing
people
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for any
job
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and development
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happiness in their
live
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lives
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.
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