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The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
illsratue
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illustrate
 the
percentage
 of number the population in
one
 country ,by
age
group
 who visited
one
 or more
museums
.The
percentage
 of
people
 who visited
one
mesum
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museum
,by
age
 55-64 in
year
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the year
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 2006 was higher than
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in other
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other
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another
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year
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years
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. The number of
percentage
people
 who visited at least
one
 museum during
2011was
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2011 was
 25%higest than
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in 2006and
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2006and
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2006 and
 2016.
The
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age
group
 between 25 and 34 the
percentage
 of
population
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the population
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 is higher in
year
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the year
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 2016 but in
year
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the year
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 2011 the
percentage
 of
population
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the population
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 who visited
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the museum
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museum
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museums
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higher
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was higher
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 than
the
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in the
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year
 2006.
Moreover
 in
age
group
 between
age
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ages
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 35 and 44 is around 37% which is the
high
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highest
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percectage
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percentage
visited
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of visited
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the
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apply
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museums
.On
other
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the other
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 hand ,in 2006 the
percentage
 of
people
 who visited the
museums
20
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was 20
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% less than
year
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the year
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 2011,which is the number of
people
 who visited the
museums
 was 30%.In between
this
age
group
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group,
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 55-64
percentage
 who visited the
museums
 was the highest
40
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at 40
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% during
year
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the year
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 2006 but lowest
other
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in other
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 years .
To sum up
 ,the chart shows
alot
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a lot
 of information about
percentage
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the percentage
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 who visited
museums
 between
this
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the
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 years 2006,2011and 2016. in the chart the hight
percentge
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percentage
 40%in
age
group
 55-64 in the
year
 2006and the lowest
percentage
 in
age
group
 65+around 18%in
year
 2011
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, one, age, group, museums, people, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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