Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they shiuld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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task achievement
Make sure to address both views comprehensively and provide a clear opinion. Right now, the response only partially discusses one view and does not fully engage with the other.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your opinion. The current essay lacks a concluding paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas logically. Use clear paragraphs to separate different points and ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
task achievement
You address an important debate about education and the value of different fields of study.
coherence cohesion
The introduction sets a clear context for the discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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