The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict the percentage of British students who can speak additional languages, at an English university in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, there are striking similarities in both charts as Spanish speakers dominated in both years. German and two other language speakers were the smallest proportion in both 2000 and 2010.
Firstly
, in 2000, the largest portion was attributed to Spanish, with a whopping 30% of learners.
Similarly
, German and two other languages were the rarer portions, with just 10% each; with another language and French being the next most spoken at 15% each.
Finally
, pupils who did not speak another dialect comprised 20%. When
this
survey was conducted in 2010, the number of Spanish linguists increased by 5%, which was still the most popular tongue.
Consequently
, four categories shared the lowest rank at 10% - these were French, German, no other language and two other languages.
Lastly
, those who were not bilingual increased to 20%.
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