The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the graph
illustrate
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the amount of food (kg per person) , which was eaten by
Australian
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Australians
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over a period of 60 years from 1950 to 2010.
it is clear that
vegetables and fruit were consumed the most .
moreover
, 4 nutrients had some fluctuations ,
while
seafood remained steady . in
further
detal
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detail
, from 1950 to 1970
vegetable
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vegetables
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, fruit and meat saw a
slightly
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decreases
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,
while
consumption of
the
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bread
increase
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considerably from 4o to almost 60.
moreover
, between 1970 to 1990 bread s
sell
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fell from
near
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60 to
approximetly
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approximately
50 ,
whereas
the other factors except seafood
fluctauated
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fluctuated
. moving into the next 40 years ( from 1990 to 2010) vegetables and fruit rose dramatically to peak of 160 and 140 respectively , which is the highest amount for them over the shown period.
by contrast
, meat decreased from
near
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120 to 80 .
furthermore
, bread after some fluctuation , increased markedly to 60.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • dietary preferences
  • staple foods
  • health awareness
  • rising health concerns
  • shift towards healthier eating habits
  • intake
  • notable trend
  • significant feature
  • consumption
  • reflecting changing
  • availability
  • a decline towards
  • initially increased
  • steady rise
  • marked decrease
  • period of stability
  • dramatically
  • a sharp rise
  • gradual change
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