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The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams compare information about the percentage of people (
men
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 and women) who were arrested for six different reasons in the United Kingdom from 2015 to 2020.
Overall
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,
men
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 are more arrested than women.
Also
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, most of the people who arrest for public intoxication
instead
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 of Theft.
According to
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 the pie chart, females had more discipline than males, for just 9
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percent
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per cent
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 of women
whose
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who were
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 arrested, but in
this
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 chart,
men
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 have 32
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percent
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per cent
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. The bar chart shows
initial
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the initial
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 reason that
men
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 were arrested
were
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was
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 public intoxication 38
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percent
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per cent
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,
then
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 the other things were Assault, Other, Drink Driving, Breaking and entering, and Theft;
furthermore
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, the two latest reasons had the same percentage that was 12
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percent
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, yet for females these reasons not same as
men
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 except fist, and
last
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 one.
Firstly
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, was public intoxication 31
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percent
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per cent
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 after that, Drink Driving, Other, Breaking and entering
,
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apply
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 Assault, and Theft had 23, 19, 18, 16, and 15
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percent
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 respectively.
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