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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The bar chart shows changes in 2002, 2007, and 2012 for total healthcare
spendings
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 as percentages of GDP happened in twelve European countries.
Overall
,
each
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 twelve countries are fairly similar for all three periods and no country
spend
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 more than twelve
percent
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per cent
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 of their gross domestic product
for
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on
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 health care.As the table reveals, the number of
Estonia
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Estonia's
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 spending
have
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has
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 the lowest
percentages
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percentage
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 with around 3
percent
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per cent
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 for all three period time.
In contrast
, Switzerland
spend
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highest
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the highest
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proportion
 with around eleven
percent
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per cent
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 each three
year
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years
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.
Besides
 Estonia and Switzerland there are two
others
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other
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 country remain the same
proportion
 over periods, namely Belgium with 10
percent
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per cent
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 and Spain with 8
percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
, Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, Poland, and Slovenia
have increase
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increased
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 their spending
proportion
around
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by around
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 one
percent
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per cent
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 in 2012.
Although
 it
show
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shows
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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in their
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their
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the
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proportion
for
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of
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 health expenditure, the stats
doesn't
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don't
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 show the amount of money they have
spend
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spent
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.
Likewise
, France, Luxembourg, and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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showing
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showed
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 a decrease percentage of their spending
for
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on
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 healthcare.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Current health expenditure: The amount of money spent on healthcare services and products at present.
  • - Percentage of GDP: The proportion of the Gross Domestic Product (the total value of goods and services produced in a country) allocated to health expenditure.
  • - Main features: The most important characteristics or aspects.
  • - Overall: In general; considering everything.
  • - Surpassed: Exceeded; went beyond.
  • - Decline: A decrease or reduction.
  • - Fluctuation: An irregular rise and fall; variation.
  • - Comparisons: The act of examining similarities and differences between two or more things.
  • - Largest increase: The greatest growth or rise.
  • - Most fluctuation: The highest degree of variation or instability.
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