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The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives the information about science qualification held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart represents the educational status
for
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of
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 both
malaysia
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Malaysia
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 and
singapore
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Singapore
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. which includes having
Master's
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a Master's
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degree
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or, Bachelor's
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, Bachelor's
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a bachelor's
degree
 , and for those who don't have any science qualifications .
Overall
 , In
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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 people who
didnt
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didn't
 complete their studies are
slighlty
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slightly
 higher than
Singapore
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in Singapore
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 . as opposed to
post graduate
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postgraduate
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 students holding Master's and
Bachlor's
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bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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that
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which
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 are higher in
Singapore
 . In terms of the
univesrty
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university
 graduates , both
Singapore
 and
Malaysia
 are
in
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at
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 the same level for individuals with a Master's
degree
 which is less
that
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than
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 10% ,
however
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however,
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 undergraduates are
opproximately
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approximately
 higher in
Singapore
comparing
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compared
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 to
Malaysia
 . For people with
non educational
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non-educational
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 expertise ,
malaysia
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Malaysia
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 has
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apply
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a
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apply
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a
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greater amount which is around 35% , and exactly 30% for
Singapore
 ,
as well as
 people with no qualification in science
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which
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it
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 is around 65% and precisely 60% for
Malaysia
 and
Singapore
 respectively .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, singapore, degree with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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