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The chart below compares the percentages of tourism dollars spent in different economic sectors in two time periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below compares the percentages of tourism dollars spent in different economic sectors in two time periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of
money
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 spent on visiting different places in two
times
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time
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 periods.
Overall
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, the highest
rate
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 of spending
money
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 by tourists can be observed for China
while
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 the opposite can be observed for Italy. more
people
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people's
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 vast amount of time
on
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apply
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visiting
United
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the United
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 Kingdom is significantly greater than that of other categories.
According to
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 the diagram,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom had the largest
rate
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 of visitors just over 9%.
this
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 number is 3 times higher than South Korea. Australia recorded 1,978 dollars for spending
money
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 by tourists and
this
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 number for visitors in
this
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 category is around 5%. The proportion of those who spend a lot of
money
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 on watching Germany and Italy are quite similar at 1,297 and 1,211, respectively. The lowest
rate
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 of visiting can be seen for Saudi Arabia at 2%. The more noticeable feature is that Brazil and France have the same amount for sharing of visitors but Brazil had a higher
rate
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 of
money
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 to spend on visiting .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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