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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of
men
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, women, and
children
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 that consumed five servings of fruit and vegetables each day in 8
years
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 in England from 2001 to 2008. Over the whole time period, the percentage of women was higher than that of
men
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’s or
children
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’s
year
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 by
year
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. Another pattern emerged for
men
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 and
children
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, which
initially
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 showed a static nature for three
years
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 from 2001 to 2003
then
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 it increased before it slightly decreased. Every
year
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 since 2001, the proportion of females eating fruits and vegetables was greater than males’ or
children
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’s.
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, in 2001 it was 9% higher than kids’ and 5% more than
men
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’s.
Likewise
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, in 2008 it was 7% higher than
children
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’s and 4% larger than
males’
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males
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.
This
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 pattern of women’s percentage being higher than any other group persists for every
year
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 during the
years
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 2001-2008. 2001, 2002, and 2003 was a period of stability for
children
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 and
men
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. The amount with 12% of
children
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 and 17% of
men
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 remained unchanged during these three
years
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.
On the other hand
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, from 2004 to 2007, the proportion of kids and males increased. In 2004, 18% of
children
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 increased to 20% for 2005. From 2005, it grew to 24% in 2006. From there, it rose to 27%. The same pattern occurred for
men
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 with a greater number of percentages during these
years
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. In 2007-2008, proportions for both groups decreased slightly by 2% for kids and by 1% for males.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, children, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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