Some cities ban private cars from entering the centre and force people to use bicycles and buses. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,more and more countries are disallowing having a personal
car
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.It is undeniable that personal belongings,like private
home
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,private
possession
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possessions
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and
also
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private
cars
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have become an essential part of our
life
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lives
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.Loads of people find it beneficial,
while
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others’ belief is that we should not have a
car
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,only public transport,but
i
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believe that
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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outweigh
advantages
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the advantages
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. One of the main negatives of forbidding a private
car
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is that you are unable to go everywhere you want and at any
time
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that is
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comfortable
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convenient
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for you.
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,let us imagine that I want to go to
restaurant
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a restaurant
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at late night.
Restaurant
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can be too far,and there is no public transport at night
time
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.
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,if I do not have my own
car
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,it would be
problem
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to arrive at the restaurant.Another disadvantage is that you might waste a lot of
time
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on
a public transport
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public transport
a means of public transport
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.I can give an example
with
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my yesterday’s situation
,
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when I
waited
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my bus for 30 minutes,but I could get by
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and save
my
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apply
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time
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.
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,there is
also
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a benefit of
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about banning
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.One of the significant
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reasons
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of
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air pollution is
large
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a large
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amount of gas that we use
everyday
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.Fewer
cars
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may lead to
fewer
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petrol that these
cars
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produce.
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,worsening of air quality would be escaped.
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last
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year’s statistics of North Korea,since they disallowed private
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,the country’s ecology has become better. Having weighed everything mentioned up,we can come to
a
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conclusion that
such
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a system that bans driving a private
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leads to
inconvenience
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the inconvenience
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of moving
,
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and
waste
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a waste
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of personal
time
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Work on your introduction to make it clearer and more specific. Start with a general statement and gradually lead to your specific opinion. Present a balanced view before stating your stance.
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Include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, when discussing the benefits of fewer cars, mention how it could improve health outcomes or decrease noise pollution.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more clearly. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea, and make sure all the sentences in that paragraph support this idea.
coherence cohesion
Improve your transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the flow of your essay. Use linking words and phrases like 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' 'Moreover,' 'On the other hand,' etc.
task achievement
You have made a clear effort to address both sides of the argument, which is commendable.
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You provided personal examples to illustrate your points, which makes your essay more relatable and engaging.

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