Some cities ban private cars from entering the centre and force people to use bicycles and buses. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays,more and more countries are disallowing having a personal
car
.It is undeniable that personal belongings,like private home
,private Fix the agreement mistake
homes
possession
and Fix the agreement mistake
possessions
also
private cars
have become an essential part of our life
.Loads of people find it beneficial,Fix the agreement mistake
lives
while
others’ belief is that we should not have a car
,only public transport,but i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
disadvantages
outweigh Correct article usage
the disadvantages
advantages
.
One of the main negatives of forbidding a private Correct article usage
the advantages
car
is that you are unable to go everywhere you want and at any time
that is
comfortable
for you.Correct word choice
convenient
For instance
,let us imagine that I want to go to restaurant
at late night.Add an article
a restaurant
the restaurant
Restaurant
can be too far,and there is no public transport at night Fix the agreement mistake
Restaurants
time
.Therefore
,if I do not have my own car
,it would be problem
to arrive at the restaurant.Another disadvantage is that you might waste a lot of Add an article
a problem
time
on a public transport
.I can give an example Remove the article
public transport
a means of public transport
a mode of public transport
with
my yesterday’s situation Change preposition
of
,
when I Remove the comma
apply
waited
my bus for 30 minutes,but I could get by Add the preposition
waited for
car
and save my
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apply
time
.
However
,there is also
a benefit of law
about banning Correct article usage
the law
cars
.One of the significant reason
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reasons
of
air pollution is Change preposition
for
large
amount of gas that we use Add an article
a large
the large
everyday
.Fewer Replace the word
every day
cars
may lead to fewer
petrol that these Correct quantifier usage
less
cars
produce.Thus
,worsening of air quality would be escaped.According to
last
year’s statistics of North Korea,since they disallowed private cars
,the country’s ecology has become better.
Having weighed everything mentioned up,we can come to a
conclusion that Correct article usage
the
such
a system that bans driving a private car
leads to inconvenience
of movingAdd an article
the inconvenience
,
and Remove the comma
apply
waste
of personal Correct article usage
a waste
time
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task achievement
Work on your introduction to make it clearer and more specific. Start with a general statement and gradually lead to your specific opinion. Present a balanced view before stating your stance.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, when discussing the benefits of fewer cars, mention how it could improve health outcomes or decrease noise pollution.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more clearly. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea, and make sure all the sentences in that paragraph support this idea.
coherence cohesion
Improve your transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the flow of your essay. Use linking words and phrases like 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' 'Moreover,' 'On the other hand,' etc.
task achievement
You have made a clear effort to address both sides of the argument, which is commendable.
task achievement
You provided personal examples to illustrate your points, which makes your essay more relatable and engaging.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.