Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace.Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a univeristy?
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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
a
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the
knowledge
that we gain from higher education places.We have two various opinion
about Change to a plural noun
opinions
true
function of a university,the first one says that all we need is Add an article
the true
a
workplace skills,Correct article usage
apply
while
other
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the other
is
says they should teach us to gain Unnecessary verb
apply
knowledge
for its own sake.Let us describe two sides and make conclusion
A commonly held belief is that institutes should provide graduates with the Add an article
a conclusion
the conclusion
knowledge
and skills needed in the student’s future workplace.As evidence of this
they indicate to whole point of studying in university.I guess the main reason why we go to Add a comma
this,
educational
is to apprentice the profession,and the apprentice is about skills,Replace the word
education
knowledge
,advices
,Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
maybe
some Correct word choice
and maybe
life-hacks
from teachers.Correct your spelling
life hacks
Furthermore
,some people just
not able to study for themselves in their homes,they might Add a missing verb
are just
to
gain Change the verb form
apply
knowing
only with Replace the word
knowledge
Add an article
the lecturer
a lecturer
lecturer
.As a Fix the agreement mistake
lecturers
results
,it leads to Correct the article-noun agreement
result
students
good workability in the future,but students still be like Change noun form
students'
student's
a children
.
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a child
children
On the other hand
,some people claim that self-development,or self-education - the
most crucial that we need.Add a missing verb
is the
For example
,they may mention that since we become student
,we start our adulthood.We Fix the agreement mistake
students
no
longer schoolboys,we must learn how to do everything by Add a missing verb
are no
ourself
,or we will not be able to get out of Correct pronoun usage
ourselves
comfort
zone,Correct pronoun usage
our comfort
it
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and it
would
be hard to become an adult.Wrong verb form
will
Therefore
,when we study for its own sake,we learn not only how to work,and also
how to be independent.
To conclude
,taking everything mentioned into account i
would argue that the second view Change the capitalization
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