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Most companies use interviews as the primary method to elect a candidate for a job some people think that this is not the best way Do you agree or disagree ?

The vast majority of
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 choose
interviews
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 as the primary
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 to hire a
candidate
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 for a job position.
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, not all people agree with that and they think there is a better
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 for
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process
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. Personally, I agree with the second argument because the better
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 to
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 a
candidate
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 is through
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. Some people might think that
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 the easiest
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 to choose a
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, but there are many loopholes
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this
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method
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. The first downside from
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candidate
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 can easily overestimate their skills and abilities with smooth-talking to impress the
employer
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. Some jobs may need
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good public speaking
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skill
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, but other jobs that rely more on technical abilities
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 as engineers and architects can not compromise it with smooth-talking. It is better for the
employer
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 to know more about the
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's technical
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skill
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 so they can hire a proper
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 for the position.
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, the
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 could implement
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 to complement the
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interviews
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process
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. Through
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, the
employer
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 can get more information about the
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candidate'
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skill
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 regarding the job position.
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 could
also
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 help the
employer
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 to cut the hiring
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 because they can choose the proper
candidate
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 faster based on the result of the
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. The standardized
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 less biased, so it would give the candidates an equal opportunity to get the job.
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 why
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 would benefit both
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the employers and the candidates. In conclusion,
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is
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 not the best
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 for
hiring
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process
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 because
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 can not fully showcase the
candidate
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's abilities and
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 tend to be biased.
On the contrary
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,
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 is the better
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 because it can
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 more
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candidate
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's
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skill
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 and make the recruitment
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 much faster.

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task achievement
Make sure to support your main points with more specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments.
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Try to develop your ideas more fully in each paragraph to ensure your points are clear and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your essay flows logically, with each paragraph building on the last. This will make your argument more persuasive.
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Your introduction clearly states your position, which is a good start.
coherence cohesion
You have a conclusion that summarizes your main points, which is important for a well-rounded essay.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear argument against interviews as the primary method for hiring.
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