The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts compare information about the number of graduate and postgraduate English students who did not go into full-time jobs after finishing university in 2008.
Overall
, most pupils preferred following their studies
instead
of working, yet
small
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a small
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group of students chose voluntary
work
.
According to
the UK graduates diagram,
the
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large group of pupils like to improve their knowledge, for we can see
further
study had 29665 persons.
In addition
, Part-time
work
, Unemployment, and Voluntary
work
had 17735, 16235, and 3500 persons respectively.
Also
, Part-time
work
was famous like Unemployment so
that
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the difference was roughly 1000. As can be seen in the United Kingdom postgraduate graph, not only the
graduates
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diagram but
also
the postgraduate graph had the same trend with various figures.
Further
study was the main reason that students did not have full-time
work
, and had 2725;
furthermore
, part-time
work
had second level with 2535, but 200 less than full-time
work
then
, Unemployment and Voluntary
work
had third and fourth situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pursuit
  • temporary employment
  • voluntary work
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • full-time employment
  • data representation
  • statistical comparison
  • post-educational paths
  • job market
  • unemployment rate
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • lifelong learning
  • employment sector
  • vocational training
  • economic trends
  • workforce participation
  • career aspirations
  • higher education
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