You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Hello Evan,
I
have
plan to continue my Unnecessary verb
apply
study
in Australia. As long as I remember, you have been Fix the agreement mistake
studies
lived
there for 3 years now. I'm considering Wrong verb form
living
to take
a Change the verb form
taking
post graduate
program for Industrial Engineering at Sydney University. I heard that I can have Correct your spelling
postgraduate
some
Correct determiner usage
a
of
part-time Change preposition
apply
job
there when I do my study. The reason why I want to have a part-time job
is because I want to have another live
income so I don't need to ask my parents to send me more money. They only need to pay for my tuition fee. Can you help me to inform Correct word choice
apply
about
the Correct pronoun usage
you about
job
that open
for a part-time Add a missing verb
is open
job
? Maybe you can send me some website link
if you find the Fix the agreement mistake
links
job
that will suit me. Or maybe you can suggest me to your current workplace,
if they Remove the comma
apply
open
for a part-time Add a missing verb
are open
job
? Thank You.Submitted by kelly on
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure to clearly break your ideas into separate paragraphs. For example, one for your study plans, one for reasons for a part-time job, and one for how your friend can help.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to use more transitional phrases to improve the flow of your letter; phrases like 'Furthermore' and 'In addition' could help.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a proper closing statement or phrase to end your letter in a more polished manner, like 'Best regards' or 'Sincerely'.
Task Achievement
Double-check for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases, such as 'I have plan to' which should be 'I have plans to' and 'They only need to pay for my tuition fee' which could be better stated as 'They only need to cover my tuition fees'.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend, which makes it engaging.
Task Achievement
The letter contains a complete response, covering all the necessary points: study plans, reason for a part-time job, and how the friend can help.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,