The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The table here illustrates the portion of activities that occupied the day of jobless men and women in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
last
year. To
summerise
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summarise
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, the highest hour spent
to do
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doing
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housework in a day by women
whereas
, men spent most of the
time
searching for
job
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a job
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in the morning and watching TV in the
afternoon
.
Incase
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of men, they spent 22% of
time
in the morning and 12% in the
afternoon
for
job
hunting. They
also
spent a lot of
time
for
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housework, shopping and gardening in the morning,
repectively
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respectively
19%,20% and 14%
time
. In the
afternoon
, they mostly
did watching
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watched
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TV which was 14%
time
as well as
job
hunting, visiting friends and relatives, gardening, spending 12%, 12%,
13
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and 13
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% of
time
respectively. The least amount of
time
went for, drinking, playing sport,visiting town and doing nothing. As for the women,
the
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they
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spent
alomost
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almost
half of their
time
doing housework in the morning and 21%
time
in the
afternoon
, which is the
higest
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highest
among them. They spent
fair
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a fair
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amount of
time
to do
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doing
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shopping, 26% of the
time
in the morning and 17% in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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. They
also
did
job
hunting, visiting friends or relatives in the morning.
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