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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table here illustrates the portion of activities that occupied the day of jobless men and women in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
last
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 year. To
summerise
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summarise
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, the highest hour spent
to do
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doing
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 housework in a day by women
whereas
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, men spent most of the
time
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 searching for
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job
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a job
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 in the morning and watching TV in the
afternoon
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.
Incase
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In the case
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 of men, they spent 22% of
time
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 in the morning and 12% in the
afternoon
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 for
job
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 hunting. They
also
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 spent a lot of
time
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for
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on
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 housework, shopping and gardening in the morning,
repectively
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respectively
 19%,20% and 14%
time
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. In the
afternoon
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, they mostly
did watching
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watched
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 TV which was 14%
time
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as well as
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job
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 hunting, visiting friends and relatives, gardening, spending 12%, 12%,
13
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and 13
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% of
time
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 respectively. The least amount of
time
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 went for, drinking, playing sport,visiting town and doing nothing. As for the women,
the
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they
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 spent
alomost
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almost
 half of their
time
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 doing housework in the morning and 21%
time
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 in the
afternoon
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, which is the
higest
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highest
 among them. They spent
fair
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a fair
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 amount of
time
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to do
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doing
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 shopping, 26% of the
time
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 in the morning and 17% in
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afternoon
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the afternoon
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. They
also
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 did
job
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 hunting, visiting friends or relatives in the morning.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, job, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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