The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of
workers
' gender, which includes service, agriculture, and industry, in
country
A and
country
B
.
Overall
, in
country
A, most male and female
workers
choose to be employed in service, occupying 56% and 49% respectively in male and female
workers
,
similarly
, in
country
B
, service practitioners occupied a great fraction of
workers
, which includes 65% of male
workers
and 88% of female
workers
. In
country
A, there are 29% of male
workers
are farmers, and there are even 14% more female farmers than males,
however
, obviously,
country
B
is not an agricultural
country
, there are very small portion of
workers
are agricultural practitioners, which only contains 3% of male and 1% of female farmers.
Country
A has 15% of the male industrial population, which is almost twice the portion of the female industrial population, which is 8%.
Similarly
, in
country
B
, a fraction of male practitioners in
industrial
Replace the word
industry
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is almost a third of the portion of females, which is 33% and 11%.
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  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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