The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar-chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar-chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graph illustrates the percentages of bottled
water
consumption
in 8 different areas and the bar
chart
demonstrates the increase in
consumption
of
bottledbottle
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bottled bottle
bottled-bottle
water
.
Overall
, in the pie
chart
, the proportion of bottled
water
consumption
in Western Europe was the largest
while
in the bar
chart
, the number of
consumption
in bottled
water
in
this
country was the lowest. And vice versa with Asia in two maps. In the pie graph, the bottled
water
consumption
rate in Western Europe reached nearly
a
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half
while
in Asia and Australia, there figure accounted for a small portion at 2% in 2001. The percentages of bottled
water
consumption
in 5 countries ranged from 5% to 15%. The figures for Africa and the Middle East were the same, accounted 5%. And in Latin America, New Zealand, USA the proportions reached 10%, 13%, and 15% respectively. In the bar
chart
, the growth of bottled
water
consumption
in Asia was highest, 14%.
This
data was approximately 7 times in Western Europe
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which
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where
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accounted for only 2%. In 6 regions, the data were not much different. In Australia and the USA, the rate reached at more than 8%.The proportion in the Middle East, Africa Latin were 10% and in Latin America, New Zealand were about 12%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.

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