You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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A glance at the graph provided reveals two

information

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pieces of information

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related to

crime

happened

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that happened

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the UK

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the previous

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year. The first one is about

relationship

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the relationship

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between age and

crime

described on

line

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a line

the line

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graph, and the second one

about

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is about

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type

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the type

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crime

represented by

pie

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a pie

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chart

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percentage

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percentages

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Overall

, it is evident that young people

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are

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commit

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likely commit

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the

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apply

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crime

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crimes

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and most

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apply

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the

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apply

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crime

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crimes

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categorized

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are categorized

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as violent

crime

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crimes

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. The total

crime

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number of crimes

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did

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committed

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by young people is approximately 180.000 classified between 8

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and

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until

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and

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28 years old, and the youngsters at 20 years old did it most.

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the age

getting

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gets

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older, the number of people doing a

crime

is decrease

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decreases

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Moreover

, the data classified types of

crime

into 5 criteria. The violent

crime

is the most happened

crime

did

last

year with 46%. Meanwhile, the second highest

crime

is only half of the

most

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apply

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crime

is classified as property

crime

. The third

crime

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apply

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related to

substance

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substances

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and is

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only one

percent

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per cent

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below the second highest, it is classified as

drug

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a drug

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crime

. And the lowest

crime

happened

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that happened

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is classified as public order

crime

with only 9%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

183 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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