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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #line #show #information #crime #uk #year #summarise #features #comparisons
A glance at the graph provided reveals two
information
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pieces of information
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 related to
crime
happened
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that happened
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 in
previous
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the previous
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 year. The first one is about
relationship
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the relationship
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 between age and
crime
 described on
line
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a line
the line
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 graph, and the second one
about
Add a missing verb
is about
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type
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the type
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 of
crime
 represented by
pie
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a pie
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 chart
on
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of
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percentage
Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
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.
Overall
, it is evident that young people
is
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are
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 more
commit
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likely commit
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 to
the
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apply
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crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
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 and most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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crime
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crimes
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categorized
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are categorized
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 as violent
crime
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crimes
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. The total
crime
Fix the agreement mistake
number of crimes
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did
Verb problem
committed
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 by young people is approximately 180.000 classified between 8
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and
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until
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and
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 28 years old, and the youngsters at 20 years old did it most.
By
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As
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 the age
getting
Wrong verb form
gets
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 older, the number of people doing a
crime
is decrease
Wrong verb form
decreases
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.
Moreover
, the data classified types of
crime
 into 5 criteria. The violent
crime
 is the most happened
crime
 did
last
 year with 46%. Meanwhile, the second highest
crime
 is only half of the
most
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apply
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crime
 is classified as property
crime
. The third
crime
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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related to
substance
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substances
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is
Correct word choice
and is
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 only one
percent
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per cent
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 below the second highest, it is classified as
drug
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a drug
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crime
. And the lowest
crime
happened
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that happened
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 is classified as public order
crime
 with only 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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