The chart below illustrates the proportion of change in the share of global students amid university graduates in different Canadian states among 2001 and 2006.

The chart below illustrates the proportion of change in the share of global students amid university graduates in different Canadian states among 2001 and 2006.
The chart above compares the percentage of international students among
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college graduates in various Canadian
states
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2001 and 2006.
Overall
, it shows that over the two time periods, all of the
states
mentioned faced an increase
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global students graduating from their colleges. Among the
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that achieved more than 10%
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graduates in 2006 are New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, and British Columbia. Previously in 2001, New Brunswick and Nova Scotia
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attained the first and the highest percentages respectively, both at a little over 5%, and still
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their positions in 2006.
On the other hand
, British Columbia saw the most significant increase in the group,
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with a little under 5% in 2001 that rose to a little over 10% in 2006.
While
the other
states
, from the highest to the lowest percentages respectively, Quebec, Alberta, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, and Ontario all achieved above 5%, with Quebec almost reaching 10%. It can be highlighted that Quebec, which previously in 2001 was in the third position, lost its position to British Columbia in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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