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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 demonstrates information about
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, of coffee and bananas in the years 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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 with , coffee
sales
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 in Switzerland were 3
million
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 in 1999. That number increased by double in the year 2004 to 6
million
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 . Denmark had an increase of a percentage of less than 1% in 1999. The number of
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 was 1.8
million
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 that number increased to 2
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 . The UK showed a significant jump in terms of coffee
sales
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 with 1.5
million
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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 and 2004. Showed an increase in all countries, except Denmark and Sweden . Switzerland with the highest
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 of bananas in 1999 and 2004 with an increase of more than double from 50
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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 in 2004.
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, Belgium was .6 and 4
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 in 1999 and 2004 respectively. Sweden and Denmark decrease a decrease in both countries Some of the bananas in both 1999 and 2004 by a big margin.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable agriculture
  • ethically sourced
  • market demand
  • statistical trends
  • sales figures
  • incremental growth
  • market share
  • consumer awareness
  • corporate responsibility
  • socially conscious consumerism
  • benchmarking
  • sales trajectory
  • quantitative comparison
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