The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The given bar chart compares the
export
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income from five different categories in 2015 and 2016
while
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the table illustrates the Product category in
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export
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an export
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amount
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from 2015 to
following
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the following
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year .
Overall
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, Petroleum and Engineered
products
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were the main
export
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earners in both years and the
export
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amount
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increased
in
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from
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2015 to 2016
on
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in
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certain categories which are engineering , textiles and
jewelry
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jewellery
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products
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. Petroleum production and Engineering goods had
same
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the same
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amount
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and reached the top of
chart
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the chart
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with about
and
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apply
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60
billion
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dollars
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. In the given two years Petroleum
products
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increased to 3% from 60
billion
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to 62
billion
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dollars
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.
While
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,
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apply
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Engineering goods
had
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apply
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faced
with
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vast increases
just
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of just
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over 60
billion
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to 65
billion
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dollars
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of
export
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earnings .
Nevertheless
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, Gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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sales
was
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were
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down by almost 5.18
percent
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per cent
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from 45
billion
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dollars
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. The other two categories had much lower
export
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values. Agricultural
products
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and textiles accounted same
amount
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both
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in both
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years former
had
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did
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not
been changed
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change
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in 2015 it earned 40
billion
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dollars
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and kept
this
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amount
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until
following
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the following
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year. The letter category increased slightly from 25
billion
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to 30
billion
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dollars
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in 2016 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, amount, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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