The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The given bar chart compares the
export
income from five different categories in 2015 and 2016 while
the table illustrates the Product category in export
Add an article
an export
amount
from 2015 to following
year .
Correct article usage
the following
Overall
, Petroleum and Engineered products
were the main export
earners in both years and the export
amount
increased in
2015 to 2016 Change preposition
from
on
certain categories which are engineering , textiles and Change preposition
in
jewelry
Change the spelling
jewellery
products
.
Petroleum production and Engineering goods had same
Change the article
the same
amount
and reached the top of chart
with about Add an article
the chart
and
60 Correct word choice
apply
billion
dollars
. In the given two years Petroleum products
increased to 3% from 60 billion
to 62 billion
dollars
.While
,
Engineering goods Remove the comma
apply
had
faced Unnecessary verb
apply
with
vast increases Change preposition
apply
just
over 60 Change preposition
of just
billion
to 65 billion
dollars
of export
earnings . Nevertheless
, Gems and jewelry
sales Change the spelling
jewellery
was
down by almost 5.18 Change the verb form
were
percent
from 45 Change the spelling
per cent
billion
dollars
.
The other two categories had much lower export
values. Agricultural products
and textiles accounted same amount
both
years former Change preposition
in both
had
not Verb problem
did
been changed
in 2015 it earned 40 Wrong verb form
change
billion
dollars
and kept this
amount
until following
year. The letter category increased slightly from 25 Add an article
the following
billion
to 30 billion
dollars
in 2016 .Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, amount, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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