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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The given bar chart compares the
export
 income from five different categories in 2015 and 2016
while
 the table illustrates the Product category in
export
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an export
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amount
 from 2015 to
following
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the following
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 year .
Overall
, Petroleum and Engineered
products
 were the main
export
 earners in both years and the
export
amount
 increased
in
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from
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 2015 to 2016
on
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in
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 certain categories which are engineering , textiles and
jewelry
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jewellery
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products
. Petroleum production and Engineering goods had
same
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the same
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amount
 and reached the top of
chart
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the chart
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 with about
and
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apply
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60
billion
dollars
. In the given two years Petroleum
products
 increased to 3% from 60
billion
 to 62
billion
dollars
 .
While
,
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apply
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Engineering goods
had
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apply
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faced
with
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apply
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vast increases
just
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of just
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 over 60
billion
 to 65
billion
dollars
 of
export
 earnings .
Nevertheless
, Gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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 sales
was
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were
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 down by almost 5.18
percent
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per cent
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 from 45
billion
dollars
 . The other two categories had much lower
export
 values. Agricultural
products
 and textiles accounted same
amount
both
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in both
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 years former
had
Verb problem
did
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 not
been changed
Wrong verb form
change
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 in 2015 it earned 40
billion
dollars
 and kept
this
amount
 until
following
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the following
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 year. The letter category increased slightly from 25
billion
 to 30
billion
dollars
 in 2016 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, amount, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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