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You sent some documents by post recently, but they did not arrive. Write a letter to the post manager. In your letter -Give details of the situation -Describe the documents -Say what action you want tobe taken.

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Dear Mr or Madam, I am writing to inform you that my family has sent me some documents by post, it has not
delivered
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been delivered
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 yet
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while
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but
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 they sent
it
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them
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 two weeks ago.
This
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 is a brown paper box
thet entitled
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containing
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 all of
my
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the
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 necessary information that I have left
them
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apply
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behind and I will need
them
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it
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 month.
This
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 box
icluded
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included
includes
 my passport and my educational degree
that
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which
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are
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is
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 very important
for
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to
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 me. My parents sent them via
special
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a special
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 service by your company that you suggested to them. These certifications are crucial for my
applying
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application
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. I hope that you
finde
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find
 them as soon as possible and will solve
this
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 problem immediately. I prefer to send them to
delivery
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the delivery
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 address.I am in an emergency situation and I would like
to
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you to
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annoance
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announce
me
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apply
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what
happen
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happened
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with
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to
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 it. I look forward to
recieving
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receiving
 your response. yours faithfully, Ostore Hasani
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task achievement
There are a few typos and grammatical errors that need to be corrected for clarity: 'thet' should be 'that', 'icluded' should be 'included', 'annoance' should be 'inform' or 'let me know', etc.
coherence cohesion
Improve the structure by clearly separating the details of the situation, description of the documents, and actions you want to be taken into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is polite and appropriate for the situation.
coherence cohesion
You used a proper greeting and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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