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The bar chart illustrates the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories: local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles (all calls), from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart illustrates the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories: local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line, and mobiles (all calls), from 1995 to 2002.
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The chart below the peaks, the whole number of minutes in billions of phone calls in the UK categorized into three types from 1995 to 2002.
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, the chart includes three different types of calls, including local-fixed
lines
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, national and international-fix
lines
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, and mobiles. Whilst local-fix
lines
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 owned the majority share during the period, mobiles had the minimum portion. The chart exhibits local-fixed
lines
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 had the highest division over the years. it steadily increased from approximately 70
billion
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 minutes to its peak of 90
billion
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 in 9092 and
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 experienced a gradual downtrend to around 70 in 2002.
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, national and international-fixed
lines
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 moderately rose from slightly 40
billion
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 to over 60 in 2002, its highest number.
whereas
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 mobile call share was Less than 5
billion
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 in 1995, it reached above 20
billion
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 regularly in 1992 and dramatically rose to approximately 45 in 2002, which was the greatest growth ratio
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