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Write a letter to a local NGO (charity organization) and ask how you can join that organization. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Why do you want to join the organization •How will your services help the society?

Dear Sir, I am Jack.
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 week I, migrated to the new
resident
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 which
are
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 situated near to your charity
organization
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 office.
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, my acquaintances told
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me about
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about
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that
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 your charity
organization
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 is working well and
to help
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 a lot of
people
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 who are
staying
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living
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 below the poverty line.
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, I
am
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was
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 a social service student when was studying in
the
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apply
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college. During our leisure
times
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I
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apply
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and
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apply
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my college mates
were
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and I
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done
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did
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a
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apply
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various social acts like cleaning the streets and
delivery
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delivering
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the
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free food to some
orphanage
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.
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, arranged a free campaign to discuss about a keep clean environment.
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, I want to join
in
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apply
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your
organization
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 as a member. Eventually, social service is one of the best
act
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acts
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 among the
people
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. As a citizen of
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 country, I would like to help others. My social service and dedication will reach
to
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the
people
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 who are suffering
by
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from
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the
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apply
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poverty. So, kindly consider my request and allow me to join
in
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your charity
organization
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 for the
developing
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 of poor
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people
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 basic amenities. Regards Jack Robert.

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task achievement
You could improve clarity by avoiding repetition and unnecessary information, such as mentioning you've migrated to a new residence, as it is not directly relevant to your interest in joining the NGO.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your logical structure by clearly separating each main point into distinct paragraphs. This will make your letter easier to follow and more organized.
task achievement
Using personal experiences and examples (like your previous social service activities) adds depth to your reasons for wanting to join the NGO.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a polite and respectful tone, which is suitable for formal communication.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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