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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given column charts
illustrates
Change the verb form
illustrate
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 what UK
graduates
 and postgraduate
students
 who did not attempt full-time
work
 did after leaving college in 2008,
It is clear that
 both graduate and
postgraduate
Fix the agreement mistake
postgraduates
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 mostly preferred to do
further
 study with 29,665 for
graduates
 and 2,725 for
postgraduates
.
According to
 the two diagrams, all
students
 including
graduates
 and
postgraduates
 picked voluntary
work
 as the least destination compared to others,
whereas
 the second most picked
work
 is part-time job with 17,735 for
graduates
 and 2,535 for
postgraduates
. Unfortunately, the number of unemployed
graduates
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 16,235
students
,
also
 the quantity of unemployed
postgraduates
for are
Verb problem
was
show examples
 1,625 In conclusion, the majority of
students
 were interested
to do
Verb problem
in
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further
 study,
Nonetheless
, part-time
work
 was the second most picked opportunity for all college
students
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, students, work, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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