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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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illustrates
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 what UK
graduates
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 and postgraduate
students
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 who did not attempt full-time
work
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 did after leaving college in 2008,
It is clear that
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 both graduate and
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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 mostly preferred to do
further
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 study with 29,665 for
graduates
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 and 2,725 for
postgraduates
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.
According to
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 the two diagrams, all
students
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 including
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 picked voluntary
work
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 as the least destination compared to others,
whereas
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 the second most picked
work
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 is part-time job with 17,735 for
graduates
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 and 2,535 for
postgraduates
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. Unfortunately, the number of unemployed
graduates
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were
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 16,235
students
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,
also
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 the quantity of unemployed
postgraduates
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for are
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was
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 1,625 In conclusion, the majority of
students
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 were interested
to do
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in
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further
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 study,
Nonetheless
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, part-time
work
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 was the second most picked opportunity for all college
students
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, students, work, postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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