You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

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Dear Manager, I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I found a problem when we visited your swimming pool, and one of my friends

feel

Correct subject-verb agreement

feels

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not convenient

visit

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to visit

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there First of all, we often visit your swimming pool and we see the water in the swim very dirty and

many

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apply

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rubbish and

also

the

staff

do not care about it. so we

feel not

Verb problem

felt

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uncomfortable swimming there

and

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apply

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the

staff

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ticketing

tiketing

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did

not respond

with

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the visitor

Therefore

, your

staff

have to care and often check the condition and always suit the water every day. I found rubbish in the toilet and less dirty, I hope your

staff

more care with

this

situation, I hope you fix your management and you can give job dish so that your

staff

definition to

working

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. and keep the clean every time, thank you so much for your time . I am looking forward to hearing from you soon yours sincerely promo

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single idea per paragraph

Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea to improve clarity and coherence.

logical structure

Improve the logical structure by organizing the letter better and making sure each part flows smoothly into the next.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.

complete response

The letter addresses the key points: the problem, staff response, and suggested solution.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

159 words

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