You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
letter to inform you that I found a problem when we visited your swimming pool, and one of my friends
feel
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feels
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not convenient
visit
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to visit
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there First of all, we often visit your swimming pool and we see the water in the swim very dirty and
many
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apply
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rubbish and
also
the
staff
do not care about it. so we
feel not
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felt
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uncomfortable swimming there
and
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apply
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the
staff
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ticketing
tiketing
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did
not respond
with
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to
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the visitor
Therefore
, your
staff
have to care and often check the condition and always suit the water every day. I found rubbish in the toilet and less dirty, I hope your
staff
more care with
this
situation, I hope you fix your management and you can give job dish so that your
staff
definition to
working
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. and keep the clean every time, thank you so much for your time . I am looking forward to hearing from you soon yours sincerely promo
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea to improve clarity and coherence.
logical structure
Improve the logical structure by organizing the letter better and making sure each part flows smoothly into the next.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite.
complete response
The letter addresses the key points: the problem, staff response, and suggested solution.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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