The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph illustrates the spending on three different
categories
which Use synonyms
is
food and drink, restaurant and hotel, and entertainment among five different Correct subject-verb agreement
are
age
groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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Overall
, Linking Words
while
expenditure Linking Words
categories
of people under 60 years of Use synonyms
age
were evenly distributed and included a significant percentage of spending on entertainment, the older generation's spending was more unevenly distributed.
At Use synonyms
first,
the percentage of ‘restaurant and hotel’ steadily decrease as getting older. Linking Words
Also
, it is interesting that Linking Words
this
Linking Words
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categories
percentage Change noun form
category's
have
less than 15 % in every Correct subject-verb agreement
has
age
Use synonyms
group
, Use synonyms
while
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aged
61 and 75 Correct article usage
the aged
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group
have Change to a plural noun
groups
most
Correct article usage
the most
less
figures, only 2%.
It is noteworthy that the food and drink Correct quantifier usage
apply
categories
reported less spending in Use synonyms
under
30 Correct article usage
the under
age
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group
, Use synonyms
while
other groups reported Linking Words
first
expenditure Correct article usage
the first
is
‘food and drink’ except Correct your spelling
as
to
Change preposition
for
61
and 75 Correct article usage
the 61
age
Use synonyms
group
. Only two groups show significant changes in spending, recorded at over 20%. These are the figures for entertainment spending in the 61-75 Use synonyms
age
Use synonyms
group
and 'food and drink' spending in the over 76 Use synonyms
age
Use synonyms
group
.Use synonyms
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