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The bar chart shows the data of five portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by children, males and females per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart shows the data of five portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by children, males and females per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The supplied bar diagram demonstrates the number of portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by kids and genders per day in the United Kingdom from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 females apply jump
line
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However
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, the children and males apply fluctuation during the period.
According to
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 the data between 2001 and 2003, the males remained steady but started increasing trend until reached 2007 a downward trend of almost 27 per cent ,
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 the next option is children which is a stability per cent in 2001 and 2002 after that began doubled to 2007
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 a dip.
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, the
last
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 category is women a leap dramatically from 21% in 2001 to reaches well above 30% in 2006, during 2007 to 2008 fractionally decreasing.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption trends
  • Demographics
  • Public health campaigns
  • Per capita
  • Consumption patterns
  • Nutritional intake
  • Statistical analysis
  • Dietary habits
  • Health recommendations
  • Daily servings
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