The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people in England and Wales who owned and rented accommodation from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, renting had the largest rate in 1918
while
the rate of owning peaked in 2001. There is a rising tendency of people to purchase properties
whereas
the graph for renting goes downward most of the time. Starting with the graph for the owning of accommodation, it increased its popularity throughout the most examined periods except for 2011 when it dropped slightly by approximately 5%.
Firstly
, it started at above 20% in 1918 and kept rising until 2001 when it reached the top at just below 70%.
Although
the percentage remained stable from 1939 to 1953 at just above 30%, the rise was gradual with a minor growth by a few rates from 1991 to 2001. Turning to the graph for renting, it generally followed a downward trend. Even though the largest percentage of households rented properties at nearly 80% in 1918, it dropped severely to below 70% in 1939 and 1953 and down to below 60% in 1961, when it experienced the largest drop.
Then
, it still kept declining until it
finally
hit the bottom at just over 30% in 2001.
In contrast
to
such
consistent drops, there was a slight recovery with a rise to about 36% in 2011.
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