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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph presents the proportion of Australian
export
 with
Jaapan
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Japan
,
United
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the United
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State
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States
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,
China
, and India.
Overall
, the
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of
export
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exports
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 from
Japan
, India, and
United
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the United
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State
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States
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 declined gradually
while
China
 increased rapidly between 2000 and 2012.
To begin
 with,
Japan
 and United
State
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States
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 decreased slightly from 1990 to 1995.
Japan
 started the
precentage
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percentage
from
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at
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 about 27
percents
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percent
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 and ended up
about
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at about
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 20
in
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at
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 the beginning of five
years
. Following next
years
untll
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until
 2012, the proportion of
export
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exports
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 to
Japan
 decreased steadily.
However
, the trend of
export
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exports
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 to
US
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the US
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 fluctuated the percentages between 1995 and 2000 by
reach
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reaching
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 a peak
about
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of about
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 12
percents
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percent
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. Even though, it decreased gradually
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from years
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years
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year
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 to
years
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year
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. In comparison with the others, the proportion of
export
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exports
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 to
China
 from Australia
more
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is more
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then
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than
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 other countries.
China
 increased sharply from 5
percents
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percent
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 and reached a peak
about
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of about
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 27
percents
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percent
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 from 2000 to 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, china, japan, percents, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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