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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of British pupils who were able to speak foreign
languages
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 between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that around a third of
students
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 could speak Spanish,
while
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 other pupils could not speak other
languages
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.
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 per cent of
students
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 could speak two other
languages
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. It can be seen that around 10% of pupils could speak German in 2000 and 2010.
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 around 15% of
students
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 could speak just French. Another interesting point the number of people who could speak two different
languages
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 stayed a staple.
While
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 the number of
students
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 who could not speak other
languages
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 went down between 2000 and 2010. Looking at the details Spanish language went up between 2000 and 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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