The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the proportion of male and female workers between 60 to 64 ages in Australia

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and

Japan

. USA, and

Belgium

between 1970 and 2000.

Overall

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employment rates from four different countries were higher than women followed respectively by

Japan

, the USA, Australia, and

Belgium

. As a matter of fact,

Japan

experienced the highest number of workers reaching a peak in 1970 compared to other countries.

However

, the

trend

declined by 76

percent

to 84

percent

from 1970 to 2000.

Conversely

, the same

trend

also

happened in three different countries.

Belgium

faced statistically a downtrend from 79

percent

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to 19

percent

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and remained the highest decline

trend

among the others. In comparison with the female ratio,

Japan

still has the highest employment rates among the others.

However

, the

trend

increased gradually occurred only in the USA and Australia.

In addition

, the lowest rates of employment percentages with less than 10

percent

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were experienced by

Belgium

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5Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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Employment rate
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Fluctuation
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