The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of post-school
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diploma
, undergraduate Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
diploma
, bachelor's Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
degree
, postgraduate Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
diploma
and master's Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
degree
of different Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
gender
in Australia in 1999.
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genders
the
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male
were the majority of people Fix the agreement mistake
males
held
skilled vocational Correct pronoun usage
who held
diploma
back in 1999. In the Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
mean
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meanwhile
while
, gender differences experienced opposite
pattern as in undergraduate Correct article usage
the opposite
diploma
. Going onwards with Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
degree
getting higher, the percentage of Correct article usage
the degree
male
increased as the percentage of Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
decreased.
Upon closer examination of the data, only 3% Fix the agreement mistake
females
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of female
female
occupied in skilled vocational Fix the agreement mistake
females
diploma
, and reached the bottom of overall
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the overall
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, female
exhibit the largest number in holding undergraduate Fix the agreement mistake
females
diploma
, and slightly higher rates than men in holding Bachelor's Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
degree
. The Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
propotion
of Correct your spelling
proportion
female
was 40% less than Fix the agreement mistake
females
male
in getting post-graduate Fix the agreement mistake
males
degree
, and even lesser in the field of Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
master
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master's
degree
, continuously 30% Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
verses
70%, and 40% to 60%.
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versus
In contrast
, male
dominated in the area of skilled vocational Fix the agreement mistake
males
diploma
with 90% respectively. But only 35% of Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
male
had undergraduate Fix the agreement mistake
males
diploma
. The percentage of Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
male
slightly rose to 45% and slightly less than Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
in holding undergraduate Fix the agreement mistake
females
diploma
and significantly surpassed the number of Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
female
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females
in
getting post-graduate Change preposition
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degree
. Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
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, male
with master's Fix the agreement mistake
males
degree
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degrees
also
outnumbered female
.
In conclusion, few Fix the agreement mistake
females
female
would pursue Change to a plural noun
females
for
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apply
further
study after graduate
with Change the verb form
graduating
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a bachelor
bachelor
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bachelor's
degree
than male
. Social Fix the agreement mistake
males
stereotype
might be considered as a main factor.Fix the agreement mistake
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