The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrecan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrecan cities through the year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart demonstrates the average degrees of three African cities throughout the year,
It is clear that
Mombasa had the highest temperature in January.
According to
the chart,
Cairo
was the lowest city in temperatures from all others as shown in the graph,
However
, it had a significant increase until August when it was at its highest degree
through
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the year
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but dropped gradually from September to December.
On the other hand
, Cape Town is completely opposite to
Cairo
in seasons, in the months
June
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, July and August it had the lowest average temperatures,
Where as
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Egypt had the hottest weather in these three months, which means that summer in
Cairo
is actually winter in Cape Town. In conclusion, Mombasa and Cape Town share the same Season periods,
whereas
Egypt is opposite to them, for illustration, if
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summer in
Cairo
, it will be winter in South Africa and Kenya.
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