The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in English and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in English and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the percentage of households in rented and owned accommodation in Wales and England in 2011.
It is clear that
the rented
house
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houses
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are
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were
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very popular from 1918 to 1971,
whereas
, the owned
accommodation
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accommodations
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are
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were
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famous from 1971 to 2011. First of all,
1918
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in 1918
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, the rented household was the highest with nearly 80%. But from 1939 to 2001, they have dramatically dropped from nearly 70% down to 31%.
Then
, they have a small
increased
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by
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approximately 5%.
Second,
the owned accommodation was lowest in 1919 and
rise
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year by year with a little
percent
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per cent
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each year. And in 2001, the
owned
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number of owned
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households was highest with nearly 70%.
However
, in 2011 they
have
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had
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a significant decrease.
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