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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data regarding export earnings in different
categories
 between 2015 and 2016. The table provides the percentage change in values of each category in 2016, compared with 2015.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the value of all
categories
 has upward trends except gems and jewellery which witnessed a downward trend.
Moreover
, petroleum products and
engineerd
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engineering
 goods earned far more than the others.
Although
 textiles earned the least in 2015, it experienced a significant growth compared with other
categories
. In
a
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closer observation, the figure
of
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 engineered goods was a little less than that
of
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 petroleum products, but it increased by 8.5% as opposed to 3%, making these two
categories
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60 $
billion
.
On the contrary
, gems and jewellery declined by 5.18% to approximately 40 $
billion
. As for textiles, which earned about 25
billion
 at
first,
has a
considerably
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 rise from 15.24% to around 30
billion
, resulting in ending with just over 30
billion
, the same figure as agricultural products which rose merely 0.81%.
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