Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Traffic
and
pollution
congestion are both currently inevitable causes
to
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many nations around the world. Some are suggesting that higher values of fuels might be the best way to tackle
traffic
and
pollution
.
This
essay strongly agrees that high values of
petrol
helps
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help
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us to cure
this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
because it reduces
vehicles
on
road
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the road
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and increases
use
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the use
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of
transportation
facilities. Increasing values on fuels like
diseal
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diesel
and other petroleum products ultimately leads to
reduction
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the reduction
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of using personal
vehicles
.
This
is because not all
peoples
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people
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afford costly fuels to move around and
also
people who
use
vehicles
for
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, will turn off to
use
of
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it
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them
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.
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, in
new
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Delhi,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
passed a law back in 2018 to not
use
personal
vehicles
on weekend days,
this
helped
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
to
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tackle
traffic
and
pollution
problems
.
Secondly
,
higher
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the higher
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price of
petrol
ultimetly
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ultimately
promotes
goverment
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government
transportation
services,
this
is because
instead
of paying
higher
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a higher
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price for
petrol
,
goverment
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government
transportation
services
is
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are
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cheap and reliable
compare
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compared
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to personal
vehicles
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vehicle
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cost
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costs
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.
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,
Gujarat
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the Gujarat
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goverment
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government
has
introduces
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introduced
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GSRTC
transportation
services all around the state to tackle
traffic
and
pollution
problems
by providing
cost free
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cost-free
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transportation
. To tackle
this
issues
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issue
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, there is one method which helps to reduce both
pollution
and
traffic
congestion. By introducing electric
vehicles
,
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is because electric
vehicles
promotes
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promote
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green
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a green
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environment and do not
emmits
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emit
emits
hazardous gases like
peteol
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petrol
patrol
car
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cars
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do,
this
helps to reduce
pollution
problems
and even helps to reduce noise
pollution
.
To conclude
,
although
, increasing
petrol
prices are not suitable for
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a middle
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middle class
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middle-class
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person
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people
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,
but
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apply
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it helps us to reduce
traffic
and
pollution
problems
, which promotes less
use
of
vehicles
.
Also
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electric
vehicles
are
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might be effective
to mitigate
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in mitigating
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this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
.
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task response
Ensure that all points are clearly and thoroughly developed. Provide more detailed examples and elaborate on how higher petrol prices and electric vehicles address the issues of traffic and pollution.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating clear paragraphs, each with one main idea supported by evidence. Use linking words and phrases consistently to help the essay flow more smoothly.
task response
The essay provides a clear stance on the topic and offers relevant alternative measures such as electric vehicles.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly outline the main points of the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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