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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of people, who were born in
Australia
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 or overseas and lived in
cities
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,
towns
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, and rural areas from 1995 to 2010 in
Australia
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from both diagrams people born overseas are higher than those who were born in
Australia
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 and live in
cities
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. The lowest population lived in
towns
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 that were overseas-born in the initial year and it plummeted in the final year,
however
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, residents, who were outsiders who lived in township and rural regions plunged dramatically. It is conspicuous that the citizens who were born in
Australia
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 50% live in
cities
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 and 60%, were born overseas in 1995.
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, the crowds who chose to live in the township were 20% Australians and 10% outsiders to the country, which is half of than Australian population.
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, folks who were born in the country were 30% in 1995, which is less than 10% overseas-born. It can be experienced the public indicates more interest in living in a metropolis and rural areas than in
towns
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. Probing ahead, in 2010 after 15 years, the population increased to 80% overseas born and 65% were Australian born.
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, folks who lived by birth in
Australia
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 remained at 15% of both
towns
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 and rural areas but overseas showed less interest in living in rural regions and it decreased significantly to 5% in 2010,
whereas
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 about half of the community moved to the
cities
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 for better career opportunities as compared to 1995.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, cities, towns with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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