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The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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a comparison
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reasons
of work
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for working
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 from
home
btween
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between
male
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males
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 and females in 2019. the data are
mesured
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measured
 in percentages.
overall
, the majority of people chose to work at
home
 to save money .
In addition
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diffrent
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difference
different
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woman
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women
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 rate who
worke frome
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work from
home
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is esier
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esier
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easier
childcare
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. on the one hand, most
of
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workers
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the workers
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preffer
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prefer
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work
 from
home
 to save
the
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money by 45% and 42% for males and females
respetively
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respectively
.
howevere
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However
, a huge
percentages
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percentage
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 of girls compared with
poys
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boys
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 doing their tasks at
home
becous
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because
 it
easier
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is easier
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for
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to
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 be
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attention
for
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to
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 their kids at 26% for females .
on the other hand
, the rate of males who
thinks
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think
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 online working is more productive is 24%
wich
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which
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make
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makes
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 it higher than
woman
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women
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 by around
the
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apply
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duble
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double
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words home with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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