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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 table
ilustrates
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illustrates
 the percentages of spending
time
 habits of those who
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 have occupations in the previous year.
Overall
,
it is clear that
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 household chores are the most popular habits of unemployed ones,
while
 the proportion of drinking is the least for both genders. In terms of spending
time
 for domestic chores in the morning showed the most significant
distiniction
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distinction
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 between
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 and
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females
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, even if in the afternoon. There are 30% and 14% differences, respectively. Turning back to spending
time
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bed, the 8% of both genders decreased to nearly 0% in the late hour of the day regardless of sex.
Addtionally
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Additionally
, the figure for seeking a job in the early hour is
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 priority of men with 22%.
However
, in the afternoon more than women did
this
 behaviour (
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13%). Before the evening, none of the
female
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females
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 spend
time
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bed and playing
sprorts
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sports
, showing there are 0% of people
in
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 the table.
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