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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the percentages of spending
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 habits of those who
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 have occupations in the previous year.
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 household chores are the most popular habits of unemployed ones,
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 the proportion of drinking is the least for both genders. In terms of spending
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 for domestic chores in the morning showed the most significant
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distinction
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 and
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, even if in the afternoon. There are 30% and 14% differences, respectively. Turning back to spending
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bed, the 8% of both genders decreased to nearly 0% in the late hour of the day regardless of sex.
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, the figure for seeking a job in the early hour is
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 priority of men with 22%.
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, in the afternoon more than women did
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13%). Before the evening, none of the
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 spend
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bed and playing
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, showing there are 0% of people
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 the table.
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