The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts
compares
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time
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the time
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spending
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of
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by
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working
adults
on
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in
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various categories in
a
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unknown country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
,
time
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the time
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spending
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of
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by
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working
adults
had
been
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completely changed compared to
the
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1958. Individuals
spnedig
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spending
spend
time
on their job remained at the top in both years, where travel to work was occupied by
going
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out
category
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in 2008. Starting with
working
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category, in 1958,
adults
spended
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spent
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33% of their
time
on
job
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the job
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, which
was
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increased by 42% in 2008.
Second
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spot
occupied
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by sleeping in both years, accounting
at
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32% and 25% in 1958 and 2008, respectively.
Adults
spending their
time
with family reduced by 19% in 1958 to 6% by 2008.
However
, relaxing at home increased to 13% in 2008, which was 8% in 1958.
Traveling
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to work increased from 2% to 8% in 2008.
Last
remaining, Other interest and playing
sport
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category
also
seen increasement , from 6% in 1958 to 8% in 2008
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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