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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India
#show #consumption #food #world #two #countries #china #india
A glance at the data illustrates the
share
 of different
kind
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kinds
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 of
world
food
consumption
, namely,
China
 and
India
.
Overall
, the most striking is each
of
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country demonstrated favorite
food
compare
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compared
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 to each other. The most striking
consumption
on
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worldwide is dominated by Processed
food
 for almost half of
shares
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the shares
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 around 41%.
This
 condition
also
 reflected in
China
 and
India
, which is shows the dominant value of
share
. The next variant is
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and fruits
that
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which
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 already spend around 29%. It is
also
 mirrored in
China
 and
India
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India's
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consumption
 of Vegetables and fruits. The attention is
also
 spotted on nuts and seeds
consumption
, even though the aggregate of
world
consumption
only
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is only
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 4%, the condition
it
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seem different from
China
 and
India
, meanwhile the
utilize
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utilisation
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 of
nut
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nuts
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 and seeds
in
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appears in high portion rather than the aggregate, since the data on
China
 19%, and
India
 11%. All of
this condition
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these conditions
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 already exceed the shares of
world
consumption
 on it.
Overall
,
share
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the share
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 percentage of utilization the Processed
food
 in
China
 and
India
around
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is around
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 one-third among
others kind
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other kinds
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 of
food
, and it
reflected
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is reflected
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 by the
world
share
consumption
 percentage.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, world, food, consumption, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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