The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram above features the detailed steps by which
glass
containers are shaped. Looking from an Use synonyms
overall
perspective, it is apparent that there are 3 main stages of producing Linking Words
this
product, beginning with burning the sand, followed by working on the Linking Words
glass
and Use synonyms
finally
packing or putting the broken Linking Words
glass
in waste bins
Use synonyms
This
process begins by placing sand into the furnace, which is heated to 105 degrees, Linking Words
this
way sand changes into Linking Words
glass
. Use synonyms
This
is followed by putting that hot Linking Words
glass
into the first mould, they press on the Use synonyms
glass
shaping it with pressure. In the next Use synonyms
stage
they put that Add a comma
stage,
glass
into the second mould which has thicker walls. It allows air to come in, the air makes our Use synonyms
glass
more round. After Use synonyms
that
we put Add a comma
that,
Use synonyms
glass
into Correct article usage
the glass
kiln
heated to 482 degrees so it Correct article usage
a kiln
can
acquire the right shape. Wrong verb form
could
This
is followed by drying the Linking Words
glass
in the same device for 60 minutes at 25 degrees. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Finally
the product is taken by an employee Add a comma
Finally,
where
Correct word choice
who
he
cleans it, and Correct pronoun usage
apply
then
decides whether to send it Linking Words
further
Linking Words
,
or Remove the comma
apply
if
to throw it away because it was damagedCorrect word choice
apply
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