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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

#move #town #school #son #achievements #scope #interests
Dear Sir or Madame, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my interest in my son's
attendant
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to
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 your school. We are going to move to
this
 city from another one located five hours by car.
That is
 why I am planning everything before our new relocation. It is important to mention that, despite he is really intelligent, with only 10 years old, he has some
troubles
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trouble
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in
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with
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 his vision and can not see perfectly.
Nonetheless
, he has achieved high-level
score
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scores
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 in all subjects. Despite his incapacity, he is provided with a marvellous memory and he is willing to do all necessary to improve himself.
Accordingly
 his interests, he keens on in Maths, because he is notably good
in
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 numbers. I have been researching various academies in
this
 area, and yours is the most
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 to me for my son, because of your variety
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of programm
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programm
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programmes
, specifically about mathematics. I would be deeply grateful to you if you
offer
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 him a chance to learn and grow at your interesting college. I
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look forward
lookforward
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look forward
 to your prompt response, Sincerely, Katya.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter stays focused on your son's achievements and interests, without mixing in multiple points within the same paragraph.
task achievement
Double-check your grammar and sentence structure to ensure clarity and correctness.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly and respectful tone, which is suitable when addressing a principal.
greeting and closing
Clear greeting and closing which are polite and formal.
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