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The line graph represents the data requested by tourists at a tourist office in the United Kingdom over the period of 6 months, from January to June. (In person, by letter, by telephone)

The line graph represents the data requested by tourists at a tourist office in the United Kingdom over the period of 6 months, from January to June. (In person, by letter, by telephone)
Overall
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, requests for information in person and by telephone increased.
However
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, information by email decreased from the beginning. As to the data demand by mobile devices, during the first
month
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 it went down from 900 to 800 followed by
continuous
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 increment during the next months. Regarding getting information in person, from January to June it increased dramatically from 400 to 1900, roughly 450 %.
On the other hand
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, email usage for info decreased by 500, from 800 to 300 in a span of 5 months.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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